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At Gifu Prefecture, the people killed in the three major lifestyle-related illnesses (cancer, apoplexy, cardiopathy) form about 10,000 people and 60 percent of all the deceased in every year. Moreover, if 120,000 people and a reserve are included, it will be guessed that the diabetic owner of the illness is 230,000 people, and in a mature stage (40 years old - 64 years old), the people killed in the three major lifestyle-related illnesses and diabetes have come to occupy about 70 percent of the whole especially. Then, in Gifu Prefecture, aiming at the reduction by half of a lifestyle-related illness, it decides upon a ”healthy obstacle reduction-by-half plan”, and is tackling preponderantly. The respectively following reduction-by-half targets were set up for every life stage. The target achievement period of this plan is for five years from the Heisei 15 fiscal year to the Heisei 19 fiscal year.

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In Gifu, the dead by three major lifestyle-related diseases (cancer, a cerebrovascular accident, heart trouble) occupies about 10000, 60% of all deads in a year.

In addition, is supposed that a sick person of diabetes includes 120000 people, a wannabee with 230000 people || particularly || a prime of life (40 years old - 64 years old)

Then I reach it if the dead by three major lifestyle-related diseases and diabetes occupies about 70% of the whole.

Therefore, in this prefecture, I aim at a reduction by half of a lifestyle-related disease and devise ”a healthy obstacle reduction by half plan” and wrestle chiefly.

Every life stage, I set the following reduction by half target each.

An aim achievement period of this plan is five years from 2003 to 2007.

At Gifu Prefecture, the people killed in the three major lifestyle-related illnesses (cancer, apoplexy, cardiopathy) form about 10,000 people and 60 percent of all the deceased in every year. Moreover, if 120,000 people and a reserve are included, it will be guessed that the diabetic owner of the illness is 230,000 people, and in a mature stage (40 years old ? 64 years old), the people killed in the three major lifestyle-related illnesses and diabetes have come to occupy about 70 percent of the whole especially. Then, in 本県, aiming at the reduction by half of a lifestyle-related illness, it decides upon a ”healthy obstacle reduction-by-half plan”, and is tackling preponderantly. The respectively following reduction-by-half targets were set up for every life stage. The target achievement period of this plan is for five years from the Heisei 15 fiscal year to the Heisei 19 fiscal year. ”

自力で訳してみました。いかがでしょうか。

In Gifu prefecture about 10000 people are dead due to three life-style related diseases (cancer, apoplexy, cardiac disease) in every year. They represent 60% of all the diseased inside the prefecture. Moreover, it is reported that 120000 people have diabetes and 110000 people are at the risk of developing diabetes. Especially, the people who are in meridian of life (40 years old – 60 years old), take 70% of the diseased caused by three life-style diseases and diabetes. To reduce the number of the life-style related diseased, Gifu prefecture lay down “health disturbance cut by half plans” and focus on achieving their goal.

To deal with every life stage, the plans are adjusted as follows:

This plans should be achieved within five years from the Heisei 15 fiscal year to Heisei 19 fiscal year.

さきほどもいっこの方でも訳させて頂きましたので、こちらも併せて。

Within Gifu Prefecture, the number of deaths stemmed by the three major lifestyle related diseases (cancer, cerebral strokes, cardiac diseases) are 10,000 per year. This consists a ratio as large as 60% of the total number of fatalities.

Additionally, the prevalence of diabetes reaches 120,000, which the number expands to 230,000 when including the ”to-be”s. Particularly, taking the range of ages 40 to 64, the mortality rates attributed to the three major lifestyle related diseases and diabetes account for 70% of the total deaths.

Regarding this situation, Gifu Prefecture has set objectives to ”halve the number of the three major lifestyle related diseases”. These objectives have been put into implementation as the ”Project of Halving Health Disturbances”, and the prefectural government seek to focus heavily on fulfilling these objectives.

Halving targets have been set as follows with accordance to the life-stage segments.

These goals are targeted to be attained within the time-period of 5 years, from 2003 to 2007.

At Gifu Prefecture, the people killed in the three major lifestyle-related illnesses (cancer, apoplexy, cardiopathy) form about 10,000 people and 60 percent of all the deceased in every year. Moreover, if 120,000 people and a reserve are included, it will be guessed that the diabetic owner of the illness is 230,000 people, and in a mature stage (40 years old ? 64 years old), the people killed in the three major lifestyle-related illnesses and diabetes have come to occupy about 70 percent of the whole especially. Then, in 本県, aiming at the reduction by half of a lifestyle-related illness, it decides upon a ”healthy obstacle reduction-by-half plan”, and is tackling preponderantly. The respectively following reduction-by-half targets were set up for every life stage. The target achievement period of this plan is for five years from the Heisei 15 fiscal year to the Heisei 19 fiscal year.

いかがでしょうか？

The number of causes of death by three major lifestyle-related illnesses (cancer, cerebral stroke, cardiac disease) is about ten thousand in every year. That occupied entire 60% of all.

It is said that 120,000 people have diabetes. It reaches to 230,000 people including the number of those with a risk of suffering from diabetes. When tally the number of death of mature stage people (40 years old – 60 years old), dead by three major lifestyle-related illnesses and diabetes occupied 70% of all.

This is the reason why Gifu prefecture has tackled “Plan of cutting the number of health disturbance” preponderantly to reduce the number of lifestyle-related illnesses by half.

Appropriate goal are set as follows for each life stage.

These plans should be achieved within 5 years, from the 15th to 19th fiscal year of Heisei era.

貧弱な翻訳ですが。

At Gifu prefecture, the deceased for three-major lifestyle-related illnesses (cancer, apoplexy, cardiopathy) about 10000, that is 60% of all deceased in a year.

Moreover, it is inferred that the number of diabetics are 120000 people and reserve of that are 110000 people.

Especially, people who are in a manhood of life (40 years old-64 years old), deceased for three-major lifestyle-related sicknesses and diabetes are about 70% of the whole.

So Gifu prefecture aims to reduce by half of three-maijor lifestyle-related sicknesses, and decides ”healthy obstacle reduction-by-half plan”, and tackling hard it.

Gifu prefecture set up the respectively following reduction-by-half targets

for every life stage.

This plan’s target achievement period is for five years from Heisei 15 fiscal year to the Heisei 19 fiscal year.

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